since you requested a critique anyways, that is definitely a lot of improvement, not just that you manage to conjur an entirely new style. This time i wont really sugar coat it as well, gomen
all the crits will be based on your newer drawing.
Detail. So far with most of your works, i love your attention to detail and small things, because those small things are what make the picture come together. (btw, is that copic you're using? if so, that's good use of copic)
Your drawing detail flowiness is there, it's not stalwart
One thing which plagues it again is well posture and flexibility of the character itself, you could perhaps try some gesture drawings or anatomical study to get a better view of things :3
well that's all for now, and i think your improvement is quite good considering the time given